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January 15, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Hmm, I'm a little curious about the the title. Why www.cyberlee?
This is my favorite part:
That was it. As soon as her voice filled his ears, Raven lost himself in a surge of power. The darkness that had twitched and flickered on the walls came forward and swirled around them. The glass in the window shattered into a thousand pieces, joining the vortex of black power that surrounded the bed. The roar that was released shook the whole tower, setting off a collection of waves in every direction in the bay. The ever burning candles, with their flames now blue, burst forth infernos; nearly touching the now bare ceiling.
Wow, that is power. ♥
I like how Raven gave Cyberlee a choice whether to stay the way she was or to become human. Though I do think that should have been focused on a little more. I mean, that's a big decision that I don't think, in her case could be solve in just a matter of minutes, you know?
Plus, I was little confused to see that you had seperated Raven. i was little confused by it when he started going 'We' and 'Us' about himself. I mean, Raven is, in a sense, the beast, one person. He liked Cyberlee. He wanted Cyberlee. He lost control because he allowed himself to lose control, not some beast fighting for dominance. . . or at least, that's the way I saw it.
A N Y W A Y, you did good girl. . . I expect a squeal.
I'm kidding!
Maybe. =D
This is my favorite part:
That was it. As soon as her voice filled his ears, Raven lost himself in a surge of power. The darkness that had twitched and flickered on the walls came forward and swirled around them. The glass in the window shattered into a thousand pieces, joining the vortex of black power that surrounded the bed. The roar that was released shook the whole tower, setting off a collection of waves in every direction in the bay. The ever burning candles, with their flames now blue, burst forth infernos; nearly touching the now bare ceiling.
Wow, that is power. ♥
I like how Raven gave Cyberlee a choice whether to stay the way she was or to become human. Though I do think that should have been focused on a little more. I mean, that's a big decision that I don't think, in her case could be solve in just a matter of minutes, you know?
Plus, I was little confused to see that you had seperated Raven. i was little confused by it when he started going 'We' and 'Us' about himself. I mean, Raven is, in a sense, the beast, one person. He liked Cyberlee. He wanted Cyberlee. He lost control because he allowed himself to lose control, not some beast fighting for dominance. . . or at least, that's the way I saw it.
A N Y W A Y, you did good girl. . . I expect a squeal.
I'm kidding!
Maybe. =D