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April 30, 2016 at 12:00 AM
You have a few word choice errors in the first three chapters of your story. Mostly picking the wrong homophonic spelling. There is another error that is a consistent one, You are using the word "told" instead of "said" in conjunction with quotes; e.g. "Catch me," Remoni told vs. the more grammatic English "Catch me," Remoni said. Character development and plot are good, so far, as is pacing of the story in my opinion.