rate_review Reviews

This is really good but it's a bit too descriptive in the emotions

You know, much like with Hinata and Naruto, I agree with the argument that Raven and Terra kind of have first dibs on Beast Boy.

This story is really freaking good, please continue it

I have read the first the second and most of the third chapters of the story, however I find that I cannot continue. I grant you that you have a truly extensive vocabulary and it seems that you wrote this story simply to prove that; unfortunately the story suffers because of it. This story I imagine was intended to be an erotic fanfiction, however because of the excessively long winded nature of your writing it lacks eroticism. I understand the writing style you're going for here as it is much the same as my own, however it does require a balance to prevent the reader from losing interest which is exactly what has happened with myself.

I urge you to continue writing and search for that balance within yourself and once you have achieved that I do believe that you will be an incredibly successful writer, good luck.mingluc