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The idea of what to call the new Mary Jane Watson, why not Arachne? There are several different ideas for Spider-like name but why not something different than a Spider-like name? It may be a stretch to call her Scorpia but there are definitely other names to call her and it's mostly established that the symbiote the girls have are more symbiote than they are spider-copy suits and you have said in your story about the reason behind Eddie's suit being like Ultimate Venom and Gwen is Ultimate Scream in a way now. Considering that she, like Peter, lost the last of her family and is now pretty much wants Kingpin's head on a pike or nailed to a burning cross and such, her name probably should reflect what she now is since she cannot never again be who she was. I hope that gives you some thought and I can barely wait to see how this story comes together.

Wow! Two updates within a week? And they were quite possibly the most intense moments of the entire series. First, the battle to save MJ and Gwen from torture coupled with saving their lives with the symbiotes. Now we get to see them awaken and utterly refreshed thanks to the symbiote healing power. I like what you did there, making Eddie Venom in a whole new way and making MJ the Scarlet Spider. I actually think it fits her better. lol She's the one with the red hair so why shouldn't she have that role? I also see that the symbiote had a similar effect with Gwen's body chemistry on Eddie. I think that makes for some nice balance. I'm all for a little gender equality here. lol Now that everyone has their symbiotes, I look forward to seeing where you go from here. I know the end is drawing closer and this has been a great read all around. This is really special man and I applaud you for writing it!

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MarvelMaster616

You're right, man! This was an intense chapter full of some twisted yet awesome elements. The Kingpin showed no mercy to MJ and Gwen. That's to be expected. You can't become an all powerful crime lord without being ruthless in a sadistic way. That's how real criminals make a name for themselves and that's something the comics always watered down. In Ultimate Spider-Man, Fisk murdered a man with his bare hands. He's more than capable of doing what he did to MJ and Gwen. It was pretty gruesome, pouring chemicals on open cuts and pulling out finger nails. It felt like an episode of 24. But the way they were healed was something unique. I know the symbiotes have a unique method of reproduction in the comics, but this took it to an interesting albeit logical level. By mixing it's own methods with regular human gestation, it has another way of reproducing. And it seemed to work. It makes sense even that a female womb would be a good environment for them to grow. Now MJ and Gwen have symbiotes of their own. That should make them much more robust. And it could make for some very interesting sex scenes as well! lol I look forward to seeing what happens next. You've used so many amazing elements in this story that right now it's probably the most novel incarnation of Ultimate Marvel in the world and that's counting the comics. lol Great job, buddy! Keep up the awesome work. Until next time, take care!

MarvelMaster616

Wow, things just go from bad to worse for poor Peter dont they, the poor kid cant catch a break. Though at least your version is alive which is more than I can say for the canon incarnation *moment of silance*

Too bad the X-Men cant help, they can move plenty fast when they need too, Kitty it might be a good idea to keep her out of this but I'm sure Wolverine wouldnt mind lending a hand...err claw with this. There is also the Marvel Knights to consider, Peter's friends Moon Knight and Iron Fist from the ultimate series as well as Daredevil who I'm SURE wouldnt mind lending a hand. Heck there's plenty of people who are either friends with Peter/Spiderman or who would love to take Fisk down once and for all. He's not even supposed to set foot in America if I'm not mistaken.

Have to say I almost feel bad for whats going to happen to Electra, though she did kill Aunt May, and ran Black Cat through with her sais so I'll get over it quick.

Lets see what is is there? Well, Gwen could become Carnage here, she has some of the symbiot in her after all and the carnage symbiot was mostly a little of the suit a lot of other peoples blood. It said the room was filled with screams, it didnt say 'whose' screams so thats an option. I have a feeling Venom is going to be an issue in the near future but not much can be done about that right now.

The only other thing is where Peter could stay/live now that Aunt May is dead. You could do a reversal of the comics, have Peter move in with his friend Johnny and the Fantastc Four, which after Reeds turns out to be a mega villian paves the way for Peter to add Sue to his ever growing harem.

Over all you have a really good fic here, part of me wishes there was a little more action and less sex due to the fact that its a really good story in of itself. Still the lemons are good, keep up the good work dude!

Another awsome chapter keep uup the great work

The poor girls. Good filler.

Well it was a dark fic to begin with, but now it's got a lot darker. I see you've shown Fisk taking some extreme liberties with Gwen and Mary Jane. How bad do you intend on making it? If Fisk hurts either of them too much, that's going to send Peter and the symbiote into a frenzy. I look forward to seeing that! This chapter didn't have any graphic sex scenes, but I think it still works because it's moving the story forward into the home stretch. With his Aunt May dead, Peter's going to have plenty of reasons to cross so many lines. I like how you got Eddie Brock involved. They could certainly do some damage together against the Kingpin. There are so many possibilities! I look forward to seeing how far you take it. Keep up the great work, buddy! This is one of the best fics in this section and I can't wait to see how it ends!

MarvelMaster616

Please include more anal sex with the woman enjoying it in the future

nice man ready for the next

Awesome Update. Please return to this story soon.