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I'm sorry for the late review. I haven't been on this site lately and I'm disappointed in that because this was a great chapter. For once, you didn't try to get too kinky or too novel with the sex. It was just Peter and Mary Jane, making love in as normal a way as two people could. It's a nice touch, balancing out some of the other darker elements throughout this story. You've always been pretty good at those scenes and I'm glad you took some time from the symbiote twisting, gang-banging themes for something a bit more basic. But now that Mary Jane has allowed herself to be captured, it's bound to get darker. It's a pretty twisted plan, but with the symbiotes on their side it could definitely get ugly! I look forward to seeing how they all take down the Kingpin once and for all. Keep up the excellent work, my friend! I know it's not saying much given how much the comic suck these days, but this is the best Ultimate story out there in the moment. lol Until next time, take care and best wishes.

MarvelMaster616

another awsome chapter. keep up the great work.

Damn, another Cliffhanger.

This is a very interesting story, I always liked the symbiote concept and you're taking it to a fun place. It's one of my favorite stories on here and I can't wait to see where you're going with this. I'm really looking forward to Black Cat getting her own suit.

Interesting setup, freeing Frank Castle so they can sic him on the Kingpin. I like it! It definitely has the potential to get volatile very quickly. If nothing else, he'll frustrated the Kingpin to a point where he'll start making mistakes. That usually works against him like it did in the comics when he killed that guy on camera. So I definitely look forward to what you do with that. But the scene with Gwen and MJ was definitely the highlight! I'm glad you finally had them talk about the somewhat brutal circumstances that led to this point. It was pretty nasty and I'm surprised you didn't address it sooner. But I think that after everything they've been through, they have the necessary perspective if that's the right word. Plus, they sure know how to cheer each other up. lol Sable certainly knows how to talk dirty as well. It's an interesting contrast, her being so submissive when she's so tough on the outside. It makes for such colorful dialog. lol As always, it was a very entertaining chapter. I really enjoyed it and look forward to reading more! Until next time, take care and best wishes my friend!

So we finally catch up with Fury and the Black Widow. I remember how he said in the comics that not much slipped past him. I think the situation with Peter and his girls is probably something he's better off not knowing anyways. lol Nice way of working Black Widow into the mix by basically keeping an eye on fury. And all Peter has to do in return is accommodate her big dick fetish. Seems like a fair trade. lol That scene with her, Peter, and Eddie was pretty twisted. I can't imagine her body taking that sort of punishment, but if she gets off on it then why not? It's kind of sad that this position she's in now is probably more admirable than what actually happened to her in Ultimate. Hell, this is probably the best intiration of Ultimate anywhere right now. lol If only you could find a way to have them kill Miles Morales at one point, then this series would be perfect. lol Either way, looking forward to this plan Peter has. How they take down the Kingpin will have to be pretty elaborate. And Peter's talk of marrying MJ was very sweet amidst a pretty dark fic. I'm glad you threw that in there and I think it's a nice way to balance things out. Keep up the great work, buddy!

MarvelMaster616

So the symbiotes are also living sex-toys?

Well this was certainly a fun chapter! It's nice to see Kitty Pryde involved again. It's been a while for her and I see she still enjoys that tentacle fetish. It was pretty neat how you had Gwen utilize the symbiote in so many creative ways. It makes sense too because her symbiote as well as Mary Jane's came from Peter so they should have some of his physiology. That includes the 'cum' components. lol I can also tell there's been a major change for Mary Jane and Gwen. Being tortured and losing someone close to them is definitely going to give them a darker outlook. Throw the symbiote into the mix and their mentality is going to be changed in a major way. It is a bit radical, but you do make it work and for that I applaud you. I'm not sure what else you'll do with this story, but I look forward to seeing it. This has been a very entertaining read and I applaud you for your efforts. Keep up the great work! Until next time, take care and best wishes!

MarvelMaster616

Hmm, after thinking it over, the overall mental attitude of the four with the symbiote suits does seem logical after recent events. I'm curious about one science aspect: Since the suits can reproduce in a sense, does that mean the other girls in Peter's harem will get suits as well and if so, how will it affect that already have abilities like Kitty Pryde. I can see it boosting her mutant powers much like the drug Banshee can from the comics (giving a normal person mutant powers for a bit and boosting mutants own power to a whole new level if they take it).

Honestly, a bit sad to see the story come to its end but it's been one hell of a ride for Spider-Man, that much is true.

Gotta say, sorry about not leaving a review when you update this story. Something of a crime as well considering how well this story is being what it is. Both an adult-fic and a rather good follow of the comic series. Despite the fact they killed off Peter Parker in Ultimate Marvel, I'm glad you haven't done something that stupid. On the science side of this fic, definitely has some sound theory to how the symbiote can reproduce utilizing a woman's biological system. Kind of weird in a way but probably one of the most logical sense considering everything.