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I would really like to see some S&M here with the girls "punishing" Spidey for how he's been acting. Y'know typical stuff, whips and hot-candle wax dripping. I've been trying to find some Spider-Man lemons that aren't YOAI but have two or three uber-sexy ladies "punishing" Peter. If you want to throw in a third lady, may I recommend Emma Frost, I always thought she was so hot in that white-leather dominatrix outfit. Or maybe Jessica Drew, the current Spider-Woman in the orange and yellow outfit. This way you've got a red-head, a brunette, and a platnum blond. Of course I've always been wanting to see a good Spider-Man/Black Widow lemon, I'm talking about top-heavy redhead Natasha Romanova here, not that blond a cup smaller Yvonna. Good luck and I hope you continue with this trend.

Oh come on! I HATE those author notes chapters, can't you just put that in a new chapter and NOT get our hopes up? Personally I want to see more of this story as fast as you can make it.

mj a sex slave to peter and/or felcia um bring in electra, mj is felicas partner in crime , um mj and felica deside to share peter, mj becomes a nypo

Wow relly cool fic you got here, I just started to read it and damn this is good stuff. Well as for ideas you've hadn't had Peter/MJ just ot themselves other then just plowjobs that is. So how about MJ decides to take a little Peter for herself? And if Peter wanted to get a little 'revenge' on the girls by webbing them up and having his way with them might be fun for later as well. Then how about a full on three way with all of them taking part in some form or another?

hot... very hot. loved it

well, this story is kinda nice, so yea... i'm happy with it! =)

Yeah, I can definitely understand where your coming from, Arcade. Both on your time point and your point about the reasons we come here. At any rate, I hope you find your muse soon and continue, but I know these things take time sometimes, so I can fully understand why it might take a while. Just do the best job you can as soon as you feel inspired. That's all I ask. :)

How about something more on MJ bashing for the way she's been treating peter?

I'd donate ideas, except I'd be rather embarrassed to see my name attached to this. Porn without plot is all well and good, but you could do a lot better than this without abandoning the general idea you've had.

This is a response to the person who apparantly did not enjoy this story as much as the rest of you.

For the record, I realize the latest couple chapters of this story haven't been very plot driven, and I'll tell you why. If you're going to write a story heavy smut story you're going to need to do a few things, devote more time to write more, which I don't feel like doing, and/or cut out some sex scenes to develop the story more, which I won't do because I know the sex is the only reason 90% of people come to AFF. I find it hard to believe that people come here for an award winning story, because I know they don't, and I have plenty of stories as evidence to prove my point. Also, if this were a One-shot then not only would I want a decent, moderately believeable story, I'd expect it. However, writting chapter upon chapter and still holding together a decent storyline would take more time than I am willing to devote. For me this isn't even a hobby, it's just something I do when I either can't do my other hobbies or am so sick of them I need to do something else. I just write these people I know that not only will I enjoy this story, but plenty of other people will. I expect people to come to the table seeing this as what it is, masturbation material. If you didn't find it enjoyable I can see why you wouldn't, though I think if you are going to criticize my story for not having enough plot then you should have a look around AFF first, and if you're going to criticize my story, then I think there are thousands more that you need to do the same to.