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October 3, 2005 at 12:00 AM
good strong story, good ideas, all you have to work on is spelling
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May 31, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Awesome story!!!
I think you should check your spelling though. A lot of your misspelled words were due to hitting the wrong keys.
Otherwise, everything else is right on track.
Good job.
Goddess Anjanee :)
I think you should check your spelling though. A lot of your misspelled words were due to hitting the wrong keys.
Otherwise, everything else is right on track.
Good job.
Goddess Anjanee :)
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May 29, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Grammar and spelling errors aside, it is a fun little story, a little sparse on lemony goodness, but then it is a bit of a 'niche' piece with the whole infantilism thing going on. You have managed to make it entertaining and compelling even managing to let Raven have a plausible reason (other than the kink factor) to want ot be little. Cool villains, even if most of their names were a bit ackward to pronounce.
All in all a good read, perhaps take the time to look over you spelling and punctuation and you'll be golden.
All in all a good read, perhaps take the time to look over you spelling and punctuation and you'll be golden.
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May 28, 2005 at 12:00 AM
aaah the sweet, delicious pain. not so sweet i'd personally want to feel it, but...
eh, nice fic, dude. i guess there's the happy ending i hoped for.
*shrugs and walks away contentedly*
it mightn't be so happy in my fic, though...
eh, nice fic, dude. i guess there's the happy ending i hoped for.
*shrugs and walks away contentedly*
it mightn't be so happy in my fic, though...
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May 24, 2005 at 12:00 AM
GREAT, it was a really good chapter and ending. Still I was kinda hoping for more, maybe you'll consider continuing it some time.
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May 18, 2005 at 12:00 AM
damn, your fic is disturbing! but i like it, nonetheless.
BB + Rae + diapers + sex + everything else you got in there that one would find... unnerving.
i am in no way insulting your fic though. you're a good writer. don't stop.
BB + Rae + diapers + sex + everything else you got in there that one would find... unnerving.
i am in no way insulting your fic though. you're a good writer. don't stop.
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May 12, 2005 at 12:00 AM
I really like your story you should keep updating.
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May 8, 2005 at 12:00 AM
WOW!!!!!!!!! You did a good job with what you had. Give me that info. and i would have screwed it up. please don't do F/F or M/M okay? please dont mess it up and please hurry!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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May 8, 2005 at 12:00 AM
or a treesome!
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May 3, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Nice chapter, a little kinky but I really liked it. Looking forward to what happens next time. Please update soon.