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Reviews for What the heart wants

By : unicornlord
  • From ANON - Real spider on April 10, 2014
    Please continue its so good
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  • From AgentGv01 on January 04, 2012
    Whatever happened to this story, don't tell me that this is abandoned without even a word.
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  • From AgentGv01 on February 01, 2011
    Chapter 3

    well that was a nice little continuation from where we left off. Although the chapter seemed a bit shorter than normal, I don't know if you were rushing to get it out or just couldn't think of much else. For the sex scene it could have gone on a bit longer, maybe with them eating each other out, a bit more foreplay but that can come later, just an idea to help fill out the chapter a bit more.

    I do hope that the next chapter is the start of the three way relationship, that it starts off with Peter getting home (or just about to) I'm curious how the girls will get him to go along with this.

    I do have one question, one of the tags said Preg, so will one or both women end up getting knocked up? And if so, if this after MJ was pregnant the first time or in this timeline that never happened? Or will one get pregnant and then the other after wanting to have a child after helping the first woman through it with Peter? I think one and then the other would work out best as two woman pregnant would be very tough on all of them.
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  • From DSTorres on January 19, 2011
    Firstly, thank you for re-formatting Ch 1. It's much more readable now. Ch 2 was a very nice continuation. It flowed very nice but you had a few grammer/tense mistakes (nothing major). Keep up the good work.
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  • From Ratdogtwo on January 19, 2011
    Wow another hot chapter. keep up the awsome work
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  • From AgentGv01 on January 19, 2011
    Chapter 2 review

    Well glad to see the spacing issue fixed I forgot to mention that last time, thankfully someone else did. This reads much better now. Also I liked how you also brought in Felicia's point of view on how she came to feel for MJ as well, not sure if it's just lust with her with Peter and MJ but maybe that will grow into more. Maybe some bonding moments could be nice too for later.

    You turned up the heat for this chapter, liked that they started things off with the picture show, which I can't wait to see how they use with Peter. Also will you show them finishing each other off in the dressing room in the next chapter as it seems they got worked up but never really finished.

    What I don't get is why you keep saying 'Mr. Watson' since she's married her name if Mary-Jane Watson Parker, it's just really confusing when you keep using Watson to refer to Peter, hell I didn't even know what you were talking about until the end there. (I'm still not sure you're referring to Peter) so if you can could you change that or at least not do that again in any future chapters if this happens again?


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  • From Ratdogtwo on January 18, 2011
    Really intersting take on the spider-man/blackcat/mj love triangle. I am loveing in so far keep up the awsome work
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  • From DSTorres on January 18, 2011
    Interesting premise. Nice setup thus far. My only complaint is not with the writing but with the format, you've got everything bunched up so it makes it difficult to follow who is saying what from time to time.
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  • From AgentGv01 on January 17, 2011
    Okay this is a good start to things, you didn't have them jump right into if and are trying for a realistic approach (since in Spider-Girl we've seen Black Cat married to a woman after her first marriage is stands to reason she's bisexual so this is plausible)

    And you actually had her thinking things over too which is a nice touch and adds some tension into things. I'm not sure how long this will be but it will be interesting to see how a three-way relationship with them would work out. I mean would they move in together, what would they tell their friends/family, how would the sleeping arrangement work out, plus he'd have to make time for both women in his life and for each other too. Not to mention for MJ she would worry about both lovers out in costume in danger too. There is a lot to play around with and I hope you continue this.
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