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Reviews for Perfect Enemy

By : MysticMewtwo
  • From Nicfawks on April 20, 2011
    I Love this story, don't listen any of the bad reviews, i know people have there own opinions, but people aslso need to read the first story Waiting For You before they express there opinion. It's like someone getting a (lets say) a Harry Potter book and reading the last book before reading the first one and understand it. ( Everyone knows there is seven Harry Potter books) It just won't work, You need to understand this story the same way with and sequel start with the first book, i know when read it i fell in love with the story and the characters in it. I also noticed that this story hasn't been updated since November last year, i hope the bad review hasn't made you quit this story, as I would love read the next chapter and see it Leo with be ok and Alisa and the baby as well, i hope David soon sees sense and helps Alisa and the turtles. Please please please post some more soon.
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  • From ZeoViolet on March 27, 2010
    Unoldai, you're out of your mind.

    And I also see you didn't even bother to read the last story. So this jumped out at you fast? Alisa didn't get her powers from 'nowhere' for some bullshit mary sue reason. This is very much inherent to the plot of the last story, and this one as well. Why don't you bother to read that before you sit and accuse? Alisa is otherwise a very normal girl who has one quirk. Get over it. It does not make her a Mary Sue. She's very blieveable. After all, other Characters have their powers but are still very realistic. It's the base of many stories. A Mary Sue should not be so damned 'perfect'. The trap is making a character beautiful, special, too good at everything they do, everyone loves them, they take over every chapter nasueating sick and yadda yadda....not a character with flaws who just has one quirk. That is the trait of any ordinary supernatural character.

    As for the children thing, they're mutated, and that can mean adaptable. It is the right of any fanfic writer to come up with their own reasoning and explanations. You might not like it, but it is her imangiantion, not yours, and as I am her beta reader and I know what's gonna happen, why don't you sit tight and let yourself be drawn in? Because I do promise you a wild ride. Alisa's power isn't just for the hell of it. It is a storyline focus, thus necessary. Haven't you ever heard of creating a character from the inside out? Alisa was created because of an idea, and she took on a form that would fit that idea. So let this bit slide and enjoy an adventure.
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  • From Unolai on February 27, 2010
    You said reviews were encouraged, so here you go. Remember, I'm not trying to be mean, I'm trying to help;

    First off, before I say anything else, I applaude your writing skills! The story is easy to read, in proper English and provides enough detail to actually "see" it happen. That much is often rare in the real of fanfiction. Kudo's!

    Now for what I don't like. Which is pretty much your entire story. It starts with the marriage and pregnancy thing. Even in a world that has Mutant Ninja Turtles in it, getting pregnant by said turtle is pretty far-fetched. (It's the whole-other-species bit; She gives birth and his kind lays eggs.) I just can't see it happen! But fine, it's your story, so I was willing to overlook that.

    Until the "special powers" crap came up. That's when I immediatly stopped reading. As it turned out, I was mislead by your obvious talent for writing and got handed a run-of-the-mill, ordinairy ficlet. Your story, and your character especially, is unoriginal, boring and screaming Mary Sue.

    Could you seriously not think of ANYTHING to make this worth reading without giving your OC magic powers? It's such a shame! I bet you could do wat better than this!

    In fact, I DARE you to do better than this. >=D
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