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Reviews for A Spider's Web

By : LithiumHobo
  • From oxymoron02 on March 24, 2012
    At first I was ":D" waiting for the moment in chapter 8 when everything would be turned around and SHIELD would burst in.

    Then I ":("'d when the new world order was formed.
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  • From DarthMeow504 on February 14, 2011
    Please, please fix the formatting on the later chapters, it's a mess.

    And as for MJ... I have to agree with the others it's an awful idea to kill her off. It's too dark a twist and only bound to upset readers who are fans of MJ.

    If you would consider doing it, I suggest an alternate ending. Felicia hates MJ, right? So much better then to conquer her utterly. To completely own her, body and soul. Actually take her away from Peter, make the woman hers. Killing her is too easy and not as much fun as owning her.

    It would be a much more satisfying end to see MJ broken to Felicia's will, become her willing pet and slave, and then her daughter as the symbiote spawns and the offspring takes her as host. MJ would then belong to Felicia, and Peter could only have her when Felicia allows him to. And to get her revenge, she might well keep her teasing him but not letting him have her for a good long time, not giving up the game until Peter has completely been broken to her as well.

    This way, it gets rid of the disturbing and quite-frankly dealbreaking MJ-snuff aspect and feeds into the MJ/Cat pairing that is so popular. It would still be a dark fic, but killing MJ makes it just too dark. As dark as it is to that point it's a guilty pleasure, killing her crosses the line into way too dark and saps any enjoyment of the story. It's too much. It's not fun anymore, it's just depressing and disturbing and wrong.

    Please consider undoing it.
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  • From blacky on October 12, 2010
    Well, I gotta say, from start to finish, I really couldn't tell what you were going to do. From the beginning, Peter givin in to lust, cheating on MJ, Felicia getting the suit, you had twists and turns that I definitely could not see coming. The last chapter was a bit of a downer, I never was a big fan of MaryJane, but what got to me was Peter giving in. I think your Epilogue could use some work. Most of the story seemed rather thought out with lots of awesome dialog with the characters, the epilogue came off a bit halfassed.

    But all in all, interesting story.
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  • From AgentGv01 on February 20, 2010
    Well this was a strange story, I do like that you got Rogue into this as well as she's my favorite female X-men character. Although I can't stand that you killed off MJ, she's one of my favorites and I don't like seeing them killed off for no reason at all. I honestly didn't see the point and I dropped the story at this point. It was just too much of a downer and pissed me off at how I went this far only to basically hate the story by the second last chapter. I just couldn't care enough to even read the final part.

    It was a different take on the symbiote sexuality stories but I just couldn't stand what you did with MJ. I'm just not into snuff fics with my fav characters getting killed off. I hope you don't take this as a flame as it's not supposed to be, just how I felt when I got to chapter 8.
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  • From YoukoTaichou on August 08, 2009
    Genius, Pure Genius!
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