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Reviews for The Sleep Patch

By : Velkan2
  • From Nathalia on February 10, 2008
    The storyline has potential, and I don't think that the 'sleep patch' thing has been done before, but I think you would benefit from a few lessons in grammer, spelling and writing format.

    I'm nw to the TT fandom, so I don't have a good enough grip on the characters to say if they are out of character or not. However, given the 'Teen' part of the title, it is very plausible that the boy titans are a bunch of walking hormones.

    I won't start complaining about how rape is bad and you shouldn't write it, as you did put a warning in the summary. Also, my personal beliefs aside, I know several people with similar role-playing fantasies/fetishs and frankly, I'd rather you relieve yourself through writing than by other means.

    Find a beta and go over this with them, and I think that you will have the makings of a good fic.
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  • From ANON - DF on September 15, 2005
    Personally I liked it; for all of you that is outraged about the rape think about it this way: Would you rather this young person do it in real life or just release the stress via writing stories?
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  • From ANON - Golden on September 06, 2005
    You all? I like reading Non-Consensual, okay?
    Just because YOU don't like it, that does not mean others don't. So stop bashing her/him about the rape.

    And by the way, this story was attrociously written.
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  • From ANON - disgusted_londoner on September 05, 2005
    THIS IS DISGUSTING!!! I mean, I know. It's JUST a story, and i shouldn't read it if I have a problem with it. But rape is wrong, whenever, however, wherever. This is horrible, I mean what kind of deprived pervert are you?!? And I bet you're a guy. No self respecting woman would ever want this to happen to them, let alone write about it. And spare me the *this is a smut site* crap. There's a difference between smut and raping people (even if it is a fantasy/story).

    Because this is what the story is about. Raping teenage girls. YOU are fantasizing about raping teenagers.
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  • From ANON - hayden-p 16 on August 28, 2005
    dis is som story. women raped in dere sleep, da whol slade/raven sex thing. u must b quite da writer. i just hope i get touched in my sleep.

    **sigh** a girl can dream, though. a girl can dream.
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  • From ANON - phoenix on August 23, 2005
    kwl story update asap
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  • From ANON - Gen. Grievous on August 06, 2005
    Oh and Egnima, its called overreacting, its a story, if you had such a problem with the story, why did you read it to the end? Oh! But i do agree with AnatomyMatters, what happend with Starfire and Robin isn't anatomicaly possible, not unless the Tamaranians have a very very different body system then us. Though they do have 9 stomaches.
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  • From ANON - Gen. Grievous on August 06, 2005
    Very good, detailed, and it all seems out of character for everyone, except for Slade, he seemes to be his normal sadistic self. but I'm enjoying it Im looking forward to your next update
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  • From ANON - Anon on August 04, 2005
    damn
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  • From ANON - KillTheRaven on August 03, 2005
    Uh Oh sounds like someone got raped by your reaction but i have to agree with you rape is wrong.
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  • From on August 03, 2005
    Ok, you know what?

    Fuck no.

    I haven't read crap like this since fourth grade.

    Rape isn't fucking cool, and the plotline to this story is shit. I'm surprised there are guys out there actually saying this is "gret wrk" but considering how well they spell, its of little fucking wonder...they can't type with their dick in their hands.

    Ok, ok, I know, this site is for smut...but can we make it tasteful smut at least, not some two-bit piece of crap that a ten year old can write better? Jesus christ, man!

    But no, rape isn't something you should even get a boner over, because if you do, you're sick. If you get off thinking about molesting a girl while she sleeps, then you need to be locked up. Yeah, sure, you may get off reading this, but would you think it was so great if it was YOU in that position? And I can hear the arguments now; "Its just a fantasy, its not like they're real!" Yeah, well, guess what, everything starts with fantasy and works its way up on that little sick trek of sexual pleasure. Its not fucking cool, at all.

    1 star out of 5.
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  • From ANON - Desolation on August 02, 2005
    Dirty,dirty ,dirty...no romance at all...just a hard fuck....
    I love it !!!Ibet your a guy aint ya!?
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  • From ANON - Wacka Wacka on July 30, 2005
    loving it dude!
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  • From ANON - AnatomyMatters on July 25, 2005
    "He let out a lot of cum inside Starfire and some came out of her asshole." Ummm... you do know that the ass and vagina aren't connected, right?
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  • From Vagon on July 19, 2005
    Meeeh. Not too great, man.
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