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Reviews for Tell Me Nothing

By : aliccolo
  • From RogueMudblood on October 25, 2011

    I really liked how you started this off. Obviously a setup for a PWP, but very interesting, just the same. But I noticed when you got to the actual act, it seemed as though you were going to have foreplay, but suddenly changed your mind. Matt seemed to abandon the idea of tease rather abruptly.

    I found the interaction from that point interesting though - how Matt prompts Peter into fellating him. I thought the little aside with Peter humming "Maneater" was an especially nice touch.

    I would mention to you that you fluctuate tenses quite a bit. It seemed to me that you were attempting to write the story in the present tense, but quite often reverted to the (perhaps) more natural past tense of story telling.

    I do like how you brought the story full circle, to the reason Peter was there to begin with.

    Thank you for sharing!
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