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Reviews for Along Came A Spider

By : ChrisKross
  • From ANON - Kinky Penguin on August 22, 2006
    Wee! Tentacle spankings! *molests Otto*
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  • From anacsadder on August 06, 2006
    Hey, one more thing. I hope you don't take this wrong, because I really do like this fic. In fact, I didn't even really notice this the first time I looked through it, so that must mean something. Anyway, the puncuation is a little rough in some of the dialogue.
    For example, instead of: "The dialogue spoken" said the speaker.
    It should be: "The dialgue spoken," said the speaker.
    Or if the sentence ends without a 'said the speaker,' just put: "The dialogue spoken."
    Do you know what I mean? I hope I don't come across as patronizing, I'm just trying to help you make a good fic a little better. I'm sure my stories aren't perfect either.
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  • From ANON - Kinky Penguin on August 05, 2006
    Chapter 3
    This really is getting better and better. Seriously, I'm sucked in. It has even covered my desire to see more of what Peter's thinking through all of this. Now, I'm a huge Otto fangirl, with Norman a close second. My favorite pairing is Otto/Norman. I don't suppose you could do something like that, hm? Please?
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  • From ANON - Kinky Penguin on August 05, 2006
    Chapter 2
    Heh. Incestuous Goblin Love... But, Norman's a sick bastard, and that's one of the reasons I love him so much. I'm hoping the tentacle part will involve Harry in some way, but I guess I'll have to keep reading to find out. As far as the part with Peter and the Enforcers, I usually like a little more insight into the psychology of characters. I don't think Peter would have just went "Fine, fuck me, that's cool." But to everyone their own style. Anyway, next chapter...
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  • From ANON - Kinky Penguin on August 05, 2006
    Chapter 1
    Hm. Interesting. I was mostly drawn in by the words "Norman," "Sinister Six," and the code "tent." Oh, and the little bit of non con. I'm still intrigued, but the thing between Peter and Flash seemed a little sudden. I did, however, like the metaphor about playing Gran Turismo on Peter's stick, or however that quote went. I think you know what I'm talking about, anyway. Good description during the sex scene. Well, onto the next chapter.
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  • From ANON - billyjoe on July 20, 2006
    I'd love to see some venom and spider-man action, especially both ways (V/S and S/V)!
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  • From ANON - Cassandra on July 17, 2006
    Yay another update! I can't wait for the explaination of Peter's new power in the next chapter. I hope that Pete learns to harness his hot boy sexiness to defete those awfull villins. Also I really want to know what flash's mutation is.^-^
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  • From Zeroman on July 13, 2006
    Man, you're keeping the story hot, I have to respect that. Definitely cool with the weird positions and Peter's inner monologues. You have a good handle on everyone you're writing. Keep up the good work, Naughty.

    --z
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  • From ANON - will on July 08, 2006
    Sorry man, I should have reviewed after the first chapter, I totally loved where it was going. Your version of the Flash/Peter pairing is my absolute favorite and I love the way you treat the dialoge. Their 'voices' sound just the way they do in the comic. Excellent work. I also agree with cassandra's assesment of the pheromone concept, though I was bothered by Peter's lack of response to cheating on Flash, that it wasn't him doing it but spiderman instead sounds like a copout that I wouldn't expect from the character, it'd be more realistic for him to be freaked out that he *wasn't* more freaked out about it than he was, also I kinda feel like it trivializes his feelings for flash. But it's your fic, so your choice.

    Your writing and plot choices are great, I love what your doing with this and if you don't have any problem with it I may like to steal the idea of flash being a mutant in a peter/flash fic of my own sometime. Can I, pleeaaase??

    Osborne Sr. is a sicko, I'd really like to see harry get his mind back and get revenge on him, he totally deserves it. Esp since in the ultimate verse poor Harry isn't as crazy as the original comics or movie, he's actually a nice kid, maybe Flash and Peter will rescue him, trash his old man, and they'll end up a threesome. Oh, wait a minute, I like that idea, might use it myself. Anyway, keep up the good work, can't wait to see what else you come up with, and if there is anything I can do to help just let me know. Cheers

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  • From ANON - ns on July 08, 2006
    It's wonderful! More PeterFlash please!
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  • From ANON - Zeroman on June 29, 2006
    I really love this story. It got incredibly hot in the second chapter--I mean easily one of the best slash fics I've ever read. It's a shame you aren't updating! Hurry it up!
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  • From ANON - Cassandra on June 07, 2006
    Poor naughty. No reveiws so far huh? Well heres mine. I loved it. This story is so hot it knocked my panties off. Some days I just wander around the web looking for somthing just like this. Inspired smut like this is very rare you know. And another bit of praise is due for contributing to the starved spider-man fandom.

    Now on to the good stuff. I love the idea of Spider-man's powers making him a sex object. Its tantilizing and it has a basis in both science and comic book cannon.
    First the comic book link.In the regular marvel U the current Spider-woman has an ability the whenever she is frightend of nervous she releases a pheromone that makes men want her sexually. It would make sense if Peter had the same thing.

    Now for the science. As you may no male spiders are in constant danger of being eaten by the females. They are after all much smaller than the girls. In response to this threat they release a signal that says as loud as possible"Don't eat me! Fuck me instead!" Which explains Peter's reaction to sexual stimualtion in the face of danger.

    So instead of the standard fight/flight response to danger Peter has a fight/flight/fuck response.^-^

    I would love to talk to you more about the ideas presented in your story so drop me an e-mail. Till then great fic. Can't wait for more.
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  • From ANON - Sio on June 03, 2006
    Wow. This is off to an amazing start. I really love it so far. Great story, and very hot, too. I hope you'll update soon!
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