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Reviews for Lady Doom: Sequel to Minion

By : Gevaisa

From ANON - Nat on October 18, 2005
hi again tis nat loved this chappie your a great writier and this chap really involved a lot of differnt character emotions forgive ny mispelling im minus the use of a finger at thid moment thanks for a great chapt and hope to see another up soon!
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From ANON - Soulshard on October 14, 2005
There are a lot of interesting points you raise in this chapter, when i stop and think about it there are many heroes who have gained their powers by doing really stupid things or just by being in the wrong place at the wrong time. I suppose that is why i prefer villians; if a villian destroys a building they get blamed for it but if a hero does it gets overlooked dosen't seem fair does it ? On a lighter note i enjoyed the part about superhero insurance (inn-sewer-ants ?) and the mention of Joviana's psychotic mother i hope the lady her self will make an appearance soon.

Its funny that you should mention book signings because thats precisely what i was doing yesterday. He signed Thud! and Hogfather for me. He was very polite but looked tired so i didn't bother to ask any inane questions. Its a shame that you couldn't get your book signed the way you wanted in my humble opinion it was none of the bookstores business what you had written in the book.
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From ANON - Nat on October 14, 2005
Yea great chappie you get a cookie! *hands homemade cookie* keep up the great writing like the indepth detail that you bring into your characters! :-)
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From ANON - Beanie_platypus on October 13, 2005
I have returned! Chap 4 & 7- Good choice for 'mysterious history' in Janet. Of all the Marvel superheroines, she has ones of the most incredibly effed up stories of them all. Even discounting the abusive relationship, her rich lifestyle and unclear motives are really quite empty. She doesn't have the understandable or distinguished motives that Spidey has, and the fact that she sought out her powers herself for reasons of pure revenge is definetly a sign of an unbalanced personality. Still, you have to feel for her: brave enough to do incredible things, but not smart enough to see that she's endangering herself needlessly. You can go places with her. You've also made her enough of a sympathetic, if vaguely dangerous, character by recalling her own abusive relationships. I knew that such a promise of help to Jovi if Doom hurts her would *have* to come from a superheroine, but coming from Janet gives it depth, and tho she's oblivious, a history of friendship.
- I love what you've done with She-Hulk. Absolutely marvelous. Brash and mouthy in public, but privately insightful and contemplative. Frequently people forget that she was a damned good lawyer as well as a superheroine (which makes it odd for her to continue in her 'heroic' profession). Very good choice, again, and very consistent with who Susan would be friends with. I wonder, tho, why Shulkie doesn't know Matt Murdock in chap 7, tho, since they are both lawyers, presumably both working in the same court system.
-oh, the lingerie stores. So, so true to life. It's good for go a little nuts in Victoria's secret every now and again. That Susan Richards, however, is aware of the joys of kinky sex (husbandmadeofputty,husbandmadeofputty! muahahahaha!) does not bode well for my hopes that Reed walked in on something squiky in college and freaked out... (damn.) I look forward *muchly* to the lingerie's appearance in the story. However, will it have to wait until the 'official' wedding night? It's a bit late, really.
-alright, I'm going to now list all of the dangling threads that I demand you tie up in so that I can sleep at night:
HOW does Jovi know that Parker is Spider-man? Or Matt Murdock? Is it Doom's database (which would be a cop-out, I say, but very likely), or her own sneaky prowess?
WHAT about the kids? Does Doom intend to have any? This was left open from 'Minion,' and it makes me sad.
WHAT did Reed Richards know about Doom from college that made it impossible for any woman to trust him as a husband? WILL we ever see Jovi's crazy mother? Is she coming out of the woodwork during the NY stay, or should we just assume that she will only appear in reference? Is she even still alive? Will Doom have her head on a silver platter as wedding present?
WHAT HAPPENED IN THE AFTERLIFE??? (god, that's a weird sentence to put in past tense.) And why does DOOM still remember, while Jovi doesn't? Does Jovi have any lingering side effects from her trip to death? A fear of deep water? Sniffles? Nightmares from which she will wake to the comforting arms of DOOM? (pretty please?)
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From ANON - Soulshard on October 10, 2005
On to the final part of my reviews in chapter five it was a great use of designer names and the fitting room part was fun i suppose that having nice underwear will help to boost her self-confidence, when you look good you feel good. By the way i'm dying to find out exactly what Victor does wear under his armour (until you tell us i'll just amuse myself by thinking about the possibilities boxers,briefs,thongs...nothing !)
As the story goes on it is easy to see that Joviana's loyalty to Victor is very strong but i can't help but wonder which is stronger her loyalty or her morals ? The magnet part was really funny as with the fruit basket joke it was well delivered. I think i covered just about everything i would add more criticism but i cannot find anything to criticize.
P.s on a completely unconnected topic are you by any chance a Terry Prachett fan ? I think i've just realised where your screen name comes from is it from "Going Postal" ?
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From ANON - Soulshard on October 10, 2005
On to part two of my belated reviews the descriptions of Peter and Betty were short but you captured their personalities very well it was a good introduction for two new characters in the story.I had no idear that it was so hard for tall women to find clothes to fit them, i'm 5'1" and have to cut about 6" off trousers and skirts just to get them to fit.Peter is nice but a bit on the dull side (when his not fighting crime of cause), your right Victor is much more exciting.I do have one quick question if i may what is Joviana's official title ? Lady/Mrs ?
As with Peter and Betty very neat introductions for She-hulk and Wasp, i enjoyed the background between Janet and Joviana when they were children.Either Joviana has changed drastically over the years or Wasp is quite dense i'd like to think that it was a bit of both.Our heroine is quite the liar/storyteller isn't she no wonder she is so good at her job.
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From ANON - Soulshard on October 10, 2005
Gevisa my friend, don't worry i'm still here.I'm touched that missed me .Unfortunately reality caught up with me again hence my absence and for that i apologize. Ok on with the review i hope that you are sitting comfortably because this is going to be a long one. Firstly thankyou for continuing this saga (if i could afford it i would pay you to write just for me !).I love the detail in the drowning and the obvious research that went into the part about hypoglycemia and low blood sugar levels. Also i cannot wait to find out what she really said to Victor whilst they were in Hell.

In chapter two it was a nice point on how other peoples attitudes change when Joviana's status changes,i guess that this is something that she will have to get used to.The "am i paranoid ? " question was handled very tactfully i thought but i'm not sure that i could have kept a straight face whilst answering though!
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From ANON - nat on October 10, 2005
Yea presents and cute and fun one at that loved the magnet joke, keep up the great writing and hope to see another chappie up soon!
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From ANON - Nat on October 08, 2005
Hi again loved the chapter it is totally fun to go shopping with the girls ans comprare just about6 everything hope to see what vic thinks of jo new outfits soon, keep up the great writing and hope to see another chapter up from you soon :-)
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From ANON - Nat on October 07, 2005
Totally cool chapter love the way that you gave the cornflakes interpetation within and the gal pals is a great title worked well keep up the great writing and hope to see another chapter up from you soon!
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From ANON - Luna on October 07, 2005
Im speachless, I cant think up enough compliments for this story, not only does it just get better and better but your writing style and the way you draw me in with your words is amazing, this story is just wow.
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From ANON - Beanie_platypus on October 03, 2005
also, I would just like to add my wholehearted support for the fruit basket idea. Please go thru with it! It has potential for a) conversation about the relative paranoia of Reed and Doom by their lovely wives, b)comic relief at the wedding, and c) there is no c). I'm also dying to see what the Richards give as a wedding present. (a bomb? a shoe rack? something far more sinister than either?)
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From ANON - Beanie_platypus on October 03, 2005
Huzzah! please excuse the lateness of my review- life snuck up on me. I deeply enjoyed Doom's proposal in chap 1. Given the way you've written him, it seemed out of character that he would knight Jovi for saving his life and leave it at that. I wouldn't expect her to become the new Boris, but still something! You seem inclined to make more mysteries per chap, not fewer. (gr) chap2 "Am I paranoid?" Thank you, thank you, thank you, for giving me that moment. It was so hard not to imagine Jovi's reply as either "Paranoid? YOU?? *Never*" or insane laughter. Or both. But I would have loved to read Doom's account of his feelings in more detail. Chap 3- More mysteries?! Why was she being kidnapped? How did she find out who Spider-man was, if not thru personal deduction? Why are all OC's really tall? Will we ever know?
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From ANON - Nat on October 03, 2005
Yea another wonderful chapter loved the way of showing Jo's thoughts on peter and bringing him into the story hope to see another chapter up soon!
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From ANON - Demos on October 02, 2005
I like the way you incorporated Spidey into the storyline, without him hogging the spotlight. Very nicely done.
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