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Reviews for Who is Child 52?

By : redsliver
  • From Masterdudemind on November 26, 2014
    Overall, this is an excellent fic. The action is clear, the sex scene was great and it was possible to 'see' everything. I very much look forward to reading more. You're a very gifted writer (though not as twisted as me ;))

    There is a downside, however.

    Reading this, it feels as if I'm reading chapter two, that's in place of one. The heroes are investigating a crime that we the readers have no idea about, and little reason to care. Throwing the reader in the middle of what's happening. We have to absorb both what's happening, and care. Thrown in like this, it's hard to do one, let alone both.

    Death is common enough in any and all fic. You have to make us care ;)

    Second, I'm a little confused by which canon you're using. Jump City makes me think of the Titans cartoon, which Connor wasn't in. Plus the 52 crap...

    In all, these are small things in comparison to the quality of the story. Don't let your take away from this review that you're a poor writer, because you're not. I intend to read more if nothing changes, and hope it comes soon.

    But if you're gonna focus on plot as much as sex, you need to develop it. Hope to see more, soon!
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  • From ANON - freelunch on November 23, 2014
    Really enjoyed this first chapter. Admittedly the first reason is simply because of the genre type - I like seeing powerful woman being dominated by weak-ass guys.
    Besides that it's well written and appears to be really well thought out. The main character has some interesting eccentricities fitting of a comicbook character but also seems very human.

    Parts of the story can be a bit hard to follow at times but I'm sure a lot of it is probably deliberate and it works! I can really feel the Addler's powers at work in the constant contradictory emotions bombarding Hawkgirl.

    As SailorNemesis has said, I don't hold out much hope of seeing this epic to its conclusion. It's too grand and too well thought out for a fanfic so I can see it losing steam along the way. Regardless I would love to see as much of it as you're able. Thanks.
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  • From ninesenshi on November 22, 2014
    Very well written. Liked the level of detail in the sex scene. Your closing monologue concerns me. I have seen many authors with such ambition and none ever finish these encyclopedia stories. I would like to see you go through 52 girls, but that is unlikely to happen especially with the extensive plot scenes you like to write. This chap took forever to get to Hawkgirl. Less Arkham, more rapey action or you will never finish this. Also, yes he is a total MarySue, and that shade ain't coverin it.
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