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Reviews for Lost and Found

By : Hoellenspass
  • From GeorgeGlass on August 20, 2014
    Let me begin by thanking you for writing a story about Emily the Strange. You appear to be the only author on AdultFanFiction who is brave enough to take up the challenge. :)

    The story has a few language issues—mostly to do with punctuation and sentence structure—but because the story is translated, I won’t go into detail about those. I do have some comments about plot, though:
    —Emily is typically depicted as completely flat-chested, so I was confused when I read in chapter 1 that she wears a bra.
    —Given that Emily is a virgin, so I'm not sure she would really have wanted to give Raven a really big cock right away. It’s probably lucky that she wasn’t able to.
    —The story is mostly told from Emily's point of view, so the occasional, brief switches to Raven's viewpoint during sex scenes are a little disorienting.
    —Why would Emily make Raven fertile and then have unprotected sex with her? Does Emily want to get pregnant by Raven?
    —Finally, regarding sex with cats: Wouldn’t those penis-spines hurt?

    On the other hand:
    —Having four cats myself, I could really relate to the "waking up and finding them sleeping on top of you" thing (not to mention the "everybody out of the bedroom, we're trying to have sex" thing).
    —Emily turning Raven into a sex toy, rather than seeking out an actual, human partner, seems very in-character.
    —The sex scene between Raven and Emily’s mom is really hot. I especially liked how the action is triggered by Raven’s misinterpretation of what Emily’s mom says.

    Overall, I liked this story fairly well. Thank you again for writing it.

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